Homework Help: English

Posted by Laura on Sunday, February 18, 2007 at 6:27pm.

Is this a strong thesis statement:
Ms Gilman captures the struggle of the narrator as she provides evidence of the journey of the narrator’s changing mental state that is not just about a woman losing her sanity but of a woman who is suffering from a feeling of entrapment because of her husband’s and society’s expectations.

It's too long and complex to be a good thesis statement.

Please shorten it to what you want to say about the narrator's struggle.

REVISION:
Ms Gilman captures the struggle of the narrator’s changing mental state that is due to her feeling of entrapment because of her husband’s and society’s expectations.

I would use "and feeling of entrapment caused by her husband's and society's expectations."

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