ello, its me again I could anyone read my body paragraph and give me constructive critcism? My homework assignment was to create one body paragraph of the following these: By checking plots, characters, and special effects, it can be seen if the "Lone Ranger" is a good radio program. Okay I chose to do plots, please tell me any spelling mistakes or any kind of improvement needed in the folowing paragraph:
The first subject we will put into thought is plots. The Lone Ranger, was about the adventures of a masked hero and is Native American partner. The Texas Ranger was nursed back to health by his Indian partner, throughout the West. They do quite well, while using the silver mine which supplies him with money and bullets.Of course; my favorite part of the Lone Ranger is also about friendship, and each episode seemed to have a lesson both moral and how to shoot the villian.
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Your paragraph is incomplete.
Who was the Texas Ranger? What happened that he needed to be nursed back to health? What do they do well? You also need to expand on friendship, moral lessons, and shooting lessons.
Parallel structure: http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/parallelism.htm
Hm, I wonder.
Maybe it would be better at: The first subject we will put thought into is plots.
http://www.arts.uottawa.ca/writcent/hypergrammar/paragrph.html
Be sure to read through the information in the linked pages before the words Writing paragraphs in the list at the left.
Learning how to write a well developed paragraph is the first step in learning how to write a well developed essay. Without the first, you'll have huge trouble doing the second.
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First of all lets look at the plot, which is the. the plan, scheme, or main story of a literary or dramatic work, as a play, novel, or short story. The Lone Ranger was about the adventures of a masked hero and his Native American partner. The Lone Ranger and his faithful friend has many hardships and challenges, yes they did quite well considering the fact they had a silver mine which supplied them with money and bullets. Of course, my favorite part of the Lone Ranger is also about friendship, and each episod had a moral lesson.
That first sentence is still quite awkward, and now there are run-ons in there. I also still don't think it's well developed.
What hardships and challenges did they face?
How did they come into possession of this silver mine?
Etc.
It seems like you have made some improvements in your paragraph, but there are still areas that could be further developed or clarified. Here are some suggestions:
1. Begin the paragraph by stating the definition of a plot, such as "A plot refers to the plan, scheme, or main story of a literary or dramatic work, such as a play, novel, or short story."
2. After introducing the Lone Ranger as a masked hero and his Native American partner, provide a bit more context about their adventures and the challenges they face. For example, you could mention specific villains they encounter or the types of situations they find themselves in.
3. Expand on the hardships and challenges that the Lone Ranger and his partner face. Give specific examples and explain how these challenges contribute to the development of the plot. This will help make your paragraph more detailed and engaging.
4. Instead of stating that they "did quite well," explain how the silver mine contributes to their success. For example, does it provide them with necessary resources or help them overcome obstacles?
5. When discussing your favorite part of the Lone Ranger, elaborate on the theme of friendship and how it is portrayed in the show. You could mention specific scenes or interactions between the characters that highlight the importance of friendship.
6. Lastly, emphasize the moral lessons in each episode. Provide examples of these lessons and explain how they contribute to the overall quality of the show.
Remember to revise your paragraph and ensure that it is well-structured and free of run-on sentences. By providing more specific details and explanations, your paragraph will be more informative and cohesive.