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Posted by Jeremiah on Thursday, October 26, 2006 at 9:20pm.

I have spent 2 weeks writing a paper and I am trying to perfect the introduction. Below I will paste the introduction tell me what I can do to better and what questions you have and what it make you think of...

“The disease of jealously is so malignant that it converts all it takes into its own nourishment (Joseph Addison).” My comprehension of jealousy is very similar to this quote; jealousy leads to overcoming emotions and feeling leading to actions of regret and in the end punishment from God, for not overcoming the powerful temptation and actions of jealously. Controversial murder originating from roots of jealousy and anger from brothers. First death of man to ever be seen in humankind, caused by jealous rage and a sibling rivalry.


My comprehension of jealousy is very similar to this quote; jealousy leads to overcoming emotions and feeling leading to actions of regret and in the end punishment from God, for not overcoming the powerful temptation and actions of jealously. This isn't very clear. Do you mean that jealousy overcomes positive emotions? Does it lead to actions that a person regrets? Does God punish jealousy?
Please clarify this sentence and write what you mean.


The next two "sentences" are not grammatically complete sentences. They are sentence fragments. In addition, they don't make any sense to me. Please use simple sentences to explain what you mean.


Controversial murder originating from roots of jealousy and anger from brothers.

Thats my thesis but I dont understand why it not a grammatically complete sentence. or the next sentence explain how I can make them complete and keep the same idea...


"Controversial murder originating from roots of jealousy and anger from brothers."

If you change "originating" (not a complete verb) to "originated" you'll have a complete sentence. Another word change I'd suggest is changing "anger from brothers" to "anger between brothers."

=)


I there. Get a new sheet of paper- an jot down what you understand about "feelings of jealousy". Then write down what "age group" you think would most likely experience those feelings. I think it boils down to imaturity, and maybe coveting.

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